Testing a "short" format video - Local hockey arena

[rjwmorrell]

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Just looking for critiques on this 15 second video which I am testing for a "short" format platform like Tik Tok/YouTube Shorts/Insta. In the version I uploaded to Tik Tok I included some titles and music, but this is the original video and lacks both. So I am just looking for feedback on: 1) Summary/opinion of 15 second video as a platform in general, 2) length of the cuts, 3) what shots you feel should be left out/included. Other than missing titles/audio, do you like the look & feel overall? As always, I am open to your best shredding of the video. Also, I think I messed up some colour correction in post as the last cut doesn't look consistent with the others, but maybe that's just me?

Edit: I included the Tik Tok version for comparison sake. It should probably have been re-done in portrait to suit the platform. Cheers!

Thanks!